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The tidy-up

They come, they are younger and better trained and there are more of them, and he is fifty-four.

The card

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The tidy-up

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The notes

on paper

The back half. Loose by design — this is where a series would take episodes and a novel would take a long middle, and the beats underneath are the same either way.

The people Wexler sends are good and thorough and have never had anything go properly wrong. Ray has had everything go wrong and is slow and hurts. The asymmetry runs both directions and the book should be honest about the cost of every exchange: he does not walk anything off. Something in the second encounter doesn't work right again for the rest of the story.

Casey's arc dominates. She learns what her father is in pieces and out of order, some of it from him and some of it from people trying to use her, and none of it resolves into the better father she might have hoped for. The 2006 job surfaces here — what was on the ground that wasn't on the list — and it has to be allowed to be as bad as it was. If the book flinches there, the whole thing becomes an action story about a good man, which it is not.

The other ten. Five accidents in eighteen months, and a man who counted them and got out first, and has never told anyone, and now has to say it out loud to his daughter.